[FFML] [Tenchi/XOver] (Ab)Normal Chapter One

[Timothy Groves]

On 13-08-02 01:41 PM, the DragonBard wrote:
> Didn't see any noticeable grammar or spelling errors.
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> A few things though.
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> Ayeka should be used to doing things herself, and not having servants around by the point Washu shows up, so her going 'servants' and her reaction to being a 'domestic' doesn't fit.  Especially since the domestic in their home is her little sister.
Well, yeah.  She does do a fair amount of chores around the Masaki 
home.  On the other hand, that line was just too funny...
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> Also, with Tenchi, you need to denote 'which' of the series this is set in; OVA (aka Tenchi Muyo Ryo-Ohki), TV (Tenchi Universe), manga, or Tenchi in Tokyo.
I have deliberately left this unstated, because it actually doesn't 
matter.  More, the ambiguity of which series this belongs to is part of 
the point of this story.  More on that will be mentioned in later chapters.