[FFML] [Tenchi/XOver] (Ab)Normal Chapter One

[the DragonBard]

Didn't see any noticeable grammar or spelling errors.

A few things though.

Ayeka should be used to doing things herself, and not having servants around by the point Washu shows up, so her going 'servants' and her reaction to being a 'domestic' doesn't fit.  Especially since the domestic in their home is her little sister.

Also, with Tenchi, you need to denote 'which' of the series this is set in; OVA (aka Tenchi Muyo Ryo-Ohki), TV (Tenchi Universe), manga, or Tenchi in Tokyo.
 		 	   		  
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