[FFML] [Draft 1][Avengers/Marvel Comics] Chapter 4] Siblings, Spiders, and Squirrels! Oh My!

[skychan]

1. I love the idea of Castle being a cameo, or even a regularly appearing
in Joke.
2. Using storm to reverse pickpocket was nice.  I'm curious if you are
using this scene to set up a childhood for her among the morlocks.
3. Now I feel really bad for Doreen.  Not knowing you get sick from hot
fudge is not much fun at all.  And it means her trip was ruined start,
middle and finish.  You should take the group to central park or a forest
nearby so she and Barton can have climbing contests, and she would win.
4. I like your omnicient reporter, you should definitely keep her, and
possibly the spooky birds around, if the birds aren't her source of intell
that is, or even if they are.
5. It's interesting to see the view the rest of the world gets of Xavier,
given that his security is bassed on telepathy.  Shields going to be trying
for a while to slip an operative in.  I wonder how well they or more likely
Tony would do with electronic means of spying.
6. You should keep up the parenting angle, and finding advice/counciling. I
think it is a good direction for things to travel along.

Kelly,
Skywise,skychan.
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