[FFML] [Draft 1][Avengers/Marvel Comics] Chapter 4] Siblings, Spiders, and Squirrels! Oh My!

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On Dec 11, 2012, at 3:32 PM, skychan wrote:

> 1. I love the idea of Castle being a cameo, or even a regularly appearing
> in Joke.

Castle and Tony would get along, no doubt about it. We'll see. 

> 2. Using storm to reverse pickpocket was nice.  I'm curious if you are
> using this scene to set up a childhood for her among the morlocks.

Not really. My first real experience with Storm and the X-Men in general was through the 90's cartoon, so if anything, I'm going with some variation of that.

Also, well spotted.

> 3. Now I feel really bad for Doreen.  Not knowing you get sick from hot
> fudge is not much fun at all.  And it means her trip was ruined start,
> middle and finish.  You should take the group to central park or a forest
> nearby so she and Barton can have climbing contests, and she would win.

Barton's good, but honestly, the only one who could possibly keep up with her is Peter . . . and either way, Natasha would be there at the top of the tree when they got there. Because Natasha is just that badass.

> 4. I like your omnicient reporter, you should definitely keep her, and
> possibly the spooky birds around, if the birds aren't her source of intell
> that is, or even if they are.

Oh, they are an intel source, just not hers. 

> 5. It's interesting to see the view the rest of the world gets of Xavier,
> given that his security is bassed on telepathy.  Shields going to be trying
> for a while to slip an operative in.  I wonder how well they or more likely
> Tony would do with electronic means of spying.

Well, he and Jarvis would be up against Kitty Pryde and Warlock, and possibly Forge. That's no easy team to beat.

> 6. You should keep up the parenting angle, and finding advice/counciling. I
> think it is a good direction for things to travel along.

It is. If nothing else, Peter's friends are going to make it a very interesting ride. I have plans for them. Oh yes.