[FFML] Ranma 1/2 End Game Chapter 1

[David Barry]

I thank you for your comments, and I definately will be making some of the adjustments you've recommended. 
 
There is a point behind the story, and that is to mess around with the cliches. In the entire story, not once does Ranma or Akane actually say 'I love you' and if you think Akane will beat Shampoo just because of a few weeks of training, you're in for a surprise.
 
I do have a draft of the series online at:
http://thediariesuniverse.yuku.com/topic/1325/Draft-Ranma-1-2-End-Game
 
I would be grateful if you could go over the other two chapters and give me your thoughts on them.
 
Again, thank you for the best C&C I've had in a long time.

  		 	   		  
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