[FFML] [Fusion][One-Shot]{Sailor Moon] MMSS - Waiting (chapter 2)

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On May 28, 2009, at 5:03 PM, Miashara wrote:

> You know, for any number of reasons, I inherently recoil at the  
> thought of
> actually liking, much less looking forward to, a SM/MMPR cross over.  
> I keep
> reading this with a voice in the back of my head asking, "Really?  
> This?" But
> I'm getting intensely curious to see if you're going to go anywhere  
> with it.

I think it was Ronald Mabbit who said; "I don't mind going nowhere as  
long as its an interesting path."

> The cast have a unique chemistry. I'm not sure how much beyond  
> superficial
> naming conventions they resemble their original sources, but they do  
> seem to
> play off each other very well. Are the changes to the SM cast are  
> simply
> effects of the other side of the house? Don't know much about that  
> one.
> Anyway, some comments.

There are some changes. Makoto is the most obvious one, mostly because  
it makes for an interesting character change from the warrior Makoto  
we all know and love. Rei and Usagi being forced together changes them  
from bickering to outright combativness.

Ami is . . . Ami has her own arc.

>> "You know, I just don't get you."
>>
>> "Sorry."
>>
>> Minako fell back on her bed, clapped a pillow over her mouth and
>> screamed in fustration.
>
> There's something inherently hilarious about Makoto to me. I think  
> it's
> because she wanders across the dividing line between laid back and  
> Ayanami
> Rei style empty.

I wouldn't call this Makoto empty. Its more like, she simply doesn't  
feel the need to get upset. I'm honestly having a hard time keeping  
her from lapsing into surfer speak.

>> She reached for her cell phone and flipped it open, then to the
>> contacts menu.
>>
>> Minako Aino
>> Mother
>> Mother's Office
>> Rei Hino
>> Makoto Kino
>> Usagi Tsukino
>
> wow.

Yeah.

>> Next to Usagi, Shingo, her younger brother, ate silently and tried to
>> be invisible. He was convinced that someday, perhaps even tonight,
>> Usagi and Rei were going to suddenly manifest magical powers or
>> something like in an anime and slaughter each other in a spectacular
>> display of violence.
>
> I'm with Shingo.

You and about half their school.

>> Then he rolled his eyes. The watches were just them trying to show
>> each other up again. What sort of lunatic would put Rei and Usagi on
>> the same Sentai team?
>
> Was that a pun?

Possibly.

>> Artemis blinked and then chose his next words very carefully. "Your
>> Highness, as the Senior High Mage present, I am oath-bound to remind
>> you that your father forbade contact with both the Keepers and the
>> outer planets. A decision that was upheld by the Senate."
>
> Why does he refer to her as Highness? Why not Majesty?

I was trying to make it formal. Rather then the affecionate respect of  
two colleagues, one of whom happens to be the boss and There Are Rules  
about that kind of thing, this change of address is intended to be a  
sign that Artemis is in formal mode and that one must Tread Carefully.

>> The only problem that I see is that there doesn't seem much plot  
>> driven
> conflict. Other than Usagi vs Minako, everything seems to be perfectly
> functional human interaction. While you've got a great cast, unless  
> some
> crazy stuff starts happening, I don't know where this is going. But if
> you're just starting slowly, carry on.

Does there really need to be crazy stuff happening? Really? Sorry, I'm  
not trying to be dismissive or anything, I'm curious.