[FFML] [Fusion][One-Shot]{Sailor Moon] MMSS - Waiting (chapter2)
Miashara
miashara at deepfriedpuppies.com
Sun May 31 22:17:29 PDT 2009
> I was trying to make it formal. Rather then the affecionate respect of
> two colleagues, one of whom happens to be the boss and There Are Rules
> about that kind of thing, this change of address is intended to be a
> sign that Artemis is in formal mode and that one must Tread Carefully.
That came through. My question is why "Highness?" I though your Majesty was
the prefered form for a reigning monarh, like a queen, while highness was
relegated to princes, consorts, and the like.
>>> The only problem that I see is that there doesn't seem much plot
>>> driven
>> conflict. Other than Usagi vs Minako, everything seems to be perfectly
>> functional human interaction. While you've got a great cast, unless
>> some
>> crazy stuff starts happening, I don't know where this is going. But if
>> you're just starting slowly, carry on.
>
> Does there really need to be crazy stuff happening? Really? Sorry, I'm
> not trying to be dismissive or anything, I'm curious.
Not so much crazy stuff necessarily as plot driven conflict. I see no reason
to go through a season's worth of monster's of the week, but simply
narrating their interactions an actions vs a more or less off screen enemy
wouldn't go anywhere. What I'm asking about is what's going to be the
overarcing plot?
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