[FFML] 1. [FIC][BGC] Frozen Butterfly Arc 2 Chapter 4 Draft (skychan)

[J. w.]

I can see that we are into the first or 2nd ova just before Irena dies. Cool to see a new chapter out for this story. I really do like the way you interact with everyone and keep up the problems that our hero has with her cyberwear and other issues that come up with them. It was very funny youtalked about the retro 80's sweatbands and leg warmers much less the color clash of the outfits that some are wearing. I wish i could give you more details to help out with breaking things down to imporve the story. But I think that It pretty much works as is from my point of veiw. But then again I suck at editing things though. Thanks for sharing and can not wait to see more chapters of this. I really do have to say I like it.
Jason
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