[FFML] [FANFIC][NGE][SKU]World End’s Messiah Chapter 1

[Dot Warner]

My only bit of crit is that I wished you'd done more than just rehash the final sequence of the End of Evangelion beat for beat except for the bit you threw in there to connect it with Utena.  A non-EVA fan wouldn't know what's going on even if you novelized the entire EVA series, and a fan is already familiar enough with what happened that a shorter summary (in, say, less than 100 words) would have sufficed.

Now, as far as the plot premise goes, my opinion is that the theme of SKU is the choice between mindless bliss and complicated reality.  By the EoE, Shinji's already made his choice--he no longer wants to be part of the system, but he also couldn't give two shits about being the god of the new world--and Asuka's there either because she's strong willed enough to survive, or Shinji can't quite bring himself to erase her from his life.  I think that it's make more sense for Ohtori to exist in the sea of LCL as that metaphorical "Garden of Eden" from which mankind must choose to either remain or leave.


-"Dot"
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I'm my own mind-altering substance. 8)