[FFML] Mobile Suit Gundam Storm, ch. 12

[Arthur Hansen]

All in all, I didn't really find anything that stuck out as not working.
Plot is definitely moving forward. Some of the scenes jumps were just a
little bit too much, but that could be a bit of a stylistic choice. Once
again, I want to mention that there are a few times that you could have
given a quick 'this is what this scenes is' other than just a ship name.

The high security gundam facility would have been a good place to describe
some of the support technology (ie. how robotic it is, how many people,
were they laid out on the floor or set more vertically, etc.)

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Arthur Hansen

Fan artist and author.
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