[FFML] [SHnY] The Score of Haruhi Suzumiya

[Brian Randall]

On Mon, Sep 5, 2011 at 12:54 PM, Henry Cobb <henry.cobb at gmail.com> wrote:
> On Mon, Sep 5, 2011 at 12:23 PM, Brian Randall <durandall at gmail.com> wrote:
>>
>> It'd be interesting.  Not sure what it has to do with this, though.
>
> I'm willing to switch to a more acceptable story.

Err, that word choice makes me feel like a bully. >_>;;

There's nothing 'unacceptable' about your story.  You can and should
write as you wish.

> How about Kyon gets the heck confused out of him by a Haruhi who
> cycles between denial, anger, bargaining, depression, and a strange
> calmness, until Itsuki points out what this means? The big clue would
> be that Haruhi would be especially nice to little sister while at the
> same time seeming to be very sad. And she would break out in nervous
> laughter whenever The Truth was suggested to her.
>
> Or is that too fnording obvious to use? To push the cliche up to 11,
> have the ending start with a visit to her house, and her berserk
> reaction when he touches the long unused doorknob to the forbidden
> room.

I ... don't think it's too obvious?

> But I'll try a rewrite of this story that puts Haruhi into troping
> instead of bullying.

Er, sorry.  That was meant to be a helpful suggestion, not an
overbearing demand. >_<

Mostly, I was hoping to understand your goals for the story better; I
had thought my suggestions would be in-line with what I took as your
goal.  I ... could be wrong.  No one's perfect, especially not me. :)

If switching it over to troping/referring to the genre works, that's
awesome; don't feel obligated to make that change because of me,
though.

It's probably been said so many times it should be put into the FFML
FAQ, but I can be a jerk. >_>;

> -HJC
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