[FFML] [SHnY] Taniguchi and Kunikida are dead, chapter five.

[Henry Cobb]

On Sun, Aug 28, 2011 at 1:47 PM, Michael Clark <eta.bootis at gmail.com> wrote:
> This also seems very sudden.  Just, bam, Haruhi's reacting.  We don't
> even get to see Nagato convulse or anything like that.

I thought I had indicated a few seconds of Kyon's confusion as he
respond to the clang. This is not a complete and objective view of the
world, as we stuck to the Kyon.

> Talking about her step-father (?) here---this seems like a sudden
> tangent, not really segued into by mentioning the change in her name, at
> least not completely.

Ah, needs Kyon to add in the things he remembers her saying I guess.

> Take that for what you will, anyway.  It may be I'm looking for
> something that'd not intended to be there.  It wouldn't be the first
> time.

I may be pushing things a little bit too quickly towards the
conclusion, but all the pieces are now in place. The big problem is
Kyon's lack of clue, but you can see the signs in place to put him on
the right path.

One or two chapters and then its up on Feedbooks.

-HJC