[FFML] [P&F] The Grave of Candace Flynn

[Henry Cobb]

On Fri, Aug 5, 2011 at 11:06 PM, nightelf <nightelf at thekeep.org> wrote:
> Which brings me to the other thing that's missing here.  There needs to be
> some "Who am I?" thoughts here.  It goes to "Can I still be your sister?"
> and "I'm a living monument" way too fast.  Again, too much dialogue, not
> enough introspection.  Recommend rewriting the work from the moment Candace
> starts talking with her mom, and putting in this introspection.

I was wondering how to do that, without spoiling it.

The item I have in mind is "her inner nerd". She has a fully
functional Phineas inside her head of course. Perhaps have 'Kevin'
focused on the un-safety aspects of what P&F are doing. Answers
springing instantly to mind about what can go wrong with the
inventions, spotting the quickest bus connections, pointing out
several unresolved issues in cloning, etc. Once she understands what
'Kevin' is, she'll understand herself.

Candace as http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/TomatoInTheMirror
can either be a short spamfic or build up over several
chapters.Keeping a longer work inside the P&F theme framework is most
likely beyond my present abilities. The joke I really wanted to
include is her lack of a belly button.

Thanks for the comments. I will take them to heart, and I may return
to P&F someday. Candace, Stacy and that other girl are clearly a
magical girl trio, but I don't have exactly the right hook to hang
that on yet. Perhaps the third girl will get some more background
in-show and this will light the way.

-HJC
P.S.: In the movie Phineas did not have to look, to know that Ferb had
his hand up. What's all that about anyway?