[FFML] Sailor Moon 4200 - Once more unto the breach

[David McMillan]

On 1/24/2010 12:03 AM, Angus MacSpon wrote:
> Hi all,
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> Yes, believe it or not, I've finished another chapter. And it's one
> monster of a big chapter, I'm afraid. But if you're still willing (and I
> won't blame you at all if you're not), then I could use some feedback.

	<ahem>   WWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO 
HHHHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!

	Now I just have to find time to read it.  This weekend, hopefully....	

> You can find the new chapter here:
> http://shell.ihug.co.nz/~macspon/fanfic/sm4200/sm420014_beta.txt
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> As always, I'm looking for several kinds of feedback:
> -- What doesn't work? Whether it's confusing, or unclear, or
> contradictory, or just doesn't make sense?
> -- What could have been done better?
> -- What's missing?
> -- What did I just get wrong (e.g. technical errors, spelling, etc)?
>
> By the way -- this is a novel-length chapter, quite literally, so I
> don't expect instant responses.
>
> If you're not interesting in taking part any more, I'd appreciate it if
> you could drop me a note to say so, and I'll leave you off the list for
> future chapters. If you're still interested -- then yay! I'll look
> forward to hearing from you.
>
> Regards,
> Angus
>
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