[FFML] [PEANUTS] It's good to be the Queen, Charlie Brown

[John Biles]

Okay, fixed the 'lead' problem.

And yeah, there is an awful lot of baseball.  (hence the warning)

If I do another one, it won't have much baseball.


On Wed, Dec 23, 2009 at 3:23 AM, Jacob Hansen <yukito098 at gmail.com> wrote:

> I don't think I've ever even heard of Peanuts fanfiction before now.  This
> was pretty awesome though.  I was in the middle of a project and just
> glancing through the digest and wound up reading this whole fic.
>
> WARNING:  THERE IS A LOT OF BASEBALL IN THIS FIC.
> >
> > A WHOLE LOT.
> >
>
> No kidding.
>
> Admittedly the baseball did start to drag on, but I kind of think it works,
> since the game itself was dragging on (and on and on and on) too.
>
> Only one issue jumped out at me, here:
>
>
> >    "It's not that," he said.  "It's that Lucy wants to blindfold me."
>  That
> > rarely *lead* to anything good.
> >
> >
> >
> and here:
>
>
> >    Charlie Brown let himself be *lead* out of the car eventually and
> across
> > a
> > lawn and into a house;
> >
>
> (emphasis mine)
>
>  Rather than "lead" it should be "led."  I wasn't originally sure, but the
> dictionary backed up my instinct.
>
> Pretty minor, but there you are.  Awesome story.
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