[FFML] [fanfic][Sailormoon] Moonshadow, chapter 16 (Random Comments)

[The Eternal Lost Lurker]

>> Usagi sank to her knees. "Kino-san is..."
>
> Usagi is a touch sheltered, no?

No, actually, she's not. Most people would react this way to a discovery 
like this...

>> "Kino-san's personal life does not concern me," Ami said.
>> "My opinion of
>> this discovery is irrelevant. She is still Jupiter, and
>> thus is still
>> necessary to the continuation of our battle against the
>> Dark Kingdom.
>
> Okay, she is a bit cold about things....

You've read how many chapters of Moonshadow now and haven't come to expect 
this? :P

>> "It's my fault." Makoto sighed. "Dammit, this ain't the way
>> I wanted to
>> die."
>
> Yet another reminder that this is not your typical Pimp/Whore relationship 
> here.

Motoki was not your typical pimp, no.

>> The long-haired girl's brow furrowed. "I suppo..." she
>> trailed off. "But her
>> desk drawer was broken open by force!"
>
> Good clue.  I know I did not spot it.

For the sake of tact, I will refrain from commenting on this. :P

>> Makoto's phone. "They'd probably want to erase this too,
>> wouldn't they?"
>
> Stupid, or caring little about the client/contact list.

Or perhaps there's no connection whatsoever. :)

>> Ami shrugged. "It's a lead."
>
> Sombody's gonna get in trouble....

Somebody's a little bit beyond any trouble the Senshi could give them now...

>> "But then Princess Serenity and the other Senshi would
>> learn nothing from
>> the experience," Artemis replied. "If I show up to save the
>> day for them
>> every single time they get in trouble, what's going to
>> happen when they have
>> to face the Shitennou?"
>
> So at the very least he is the nastiest variant of Sink Or Swim Mentor out 
> there.

At the VERY least.

> At best, he probably knows it is stolen.  At worst Rei could end up 
> orphaned over this.

"Orphaned"? Someone didn't catch the rather blatant clue as to...ah, 
nevermind.

>> "Tsukino-hime? I believe I know who has captured
>> Kino-shi..."
>
> Well this could complicate matters.

Yup. Or it could make matters far, far more simple.

Thanks for reading and commenting. :)