[FFML] [fanfic][Sailormoon] [C&C] Moonshadow, chapter 7 (first draft)

[Will Lathan]

When Lurker writes a multi chapter fic of ANYTHING, I expect a lot.  And 
BOY did he deliver!

The opening fight scene for chapter 7 was a little short on 
choreography, but that's okay!  This fic isn't about the fights and we 
don't need a blow by blow account.

Once again, Lurker makes this fic work by concentrating on character 
development.  Makoto's reactions to becoming a senshi are perfectly 
understandable because the author spent so much time building her up in 
previous chapters.  It is apparently going to be Rei's turn soon as this 
chapter starts to put her under the glass.

He's also not above displaying a little bit of fanboyishness.

> "I would love to know what line of reasoning led to the design of
> these...costumes," Mercury muttered as they sailed through the air, skirts
> flaring. "They are completely impractical as battle attire..."
>
> "The material is magical, so what they look like doesn't really matter,"
> Luna explained as she slowed to let the two girls catch up. "The Senshi back
> in the Silver Millenium didn't look like you two. Their uniforms were
> more..." She paused. "Well, they looked like a cross between a very short
> cocktail dress and a garment I believe you call a negligee."
>   

What really kills me about that passage?  ITS CANON!!!  I've seen the 
pics of it. :)

The scenes where Usagi & Ami arrive home are ... poignant.  It says 
something that they both have the EXACT same reaction to two wildly 
different parenting styles.

> Spotting an oddly vacant kouban nearby, and glancing around to make sure
> nobody was watching, she slipped inside, crouched low so as not to be seen,
> and quietly whispered, "Moon Power, Transform."
>   
Oh come on, you just KNOW they got her on camera.
On another note, why  "Moon Power, Transform" ?  You'd think 'Timothy' 
would want her in Sailor Venus mode right off the bat.
>
> Timothy sighed. A rogue Senshi...
>
> "No...we can't have that. We can't have that at all."
>   

That sounds ominous.  Every chapter I like Timothy a little less.  I'm 
beginning to wonder if Timothy really is Artemis.

Case in point:

1.  Luna is NOT a Moon Cat in this fic, she's a youma.  Therefore, any 
"Artemis" that shows up would probably be a youma himself.  It has 
already been determined that Timothy is  a human, albeit a VERY old, 
immortal one

2.  The separation of forces.  The 'canon' Artemis & Venus spent half 
the first season separated from the main team for a good reason.  They 
were busy kicking the youma out of England.  Why is Timothy doing the 
same thing when all concerned are in Japan?  Why bother using Luna as a 
go-between when he could just 'advise' all the senshi himself?
> "I have nullified your Senshi abilities temporarily," the other man said in
> calm, even tones. "It would be prudent for you to return home, calm down,
> and take stock of what you have done this day. This is not the manner in
> which these powers are meant to be used. You exist to FIGHT evil, not to
> BECOME it." For the briefest of moments, his eyes glowed with a brilliant
> silver light. "By sunset tomorrow, you will be able to become Jupiter again.
> Use the time wisely. Talk to the Princess. She is very anxious to have words
> with you, after your abrupt departure earlier."
>
>   

> Several hours later, police would find Kanzou Mitsuhiko lying naked in a
> public park, marinated in cheap potato whiskey, babbling incoherently in a
> strange mixture of French, Russian, and Yiddish.
>   

Does anybody not get the hypocrisy in what Timothy just did?  He told 
her it was wrong to use her powers to hurt people, used HIS powers to 
hurt someone.

> He was one of the lucky ones.
>   

Probably SEVERAL someones.

For the record, I don't think Timothy is actually working for Beryl.  I 
do think is that he's the Silver Millennium's version of John 
Constantine, just BARELY on the senshi side.

Eagerly awaiting Chapter 8