[FFML] [FIC][BGC] Frozen Butterfly Arc 3 Chapter 5 Draft

[O David Morgan]

skychan wrote:

>>>> Maybe you'll just owe her later?  >_>
>>>>
>>>
>>> Or prove she's a little more human than boomer, or prove she has no morals
>>> and is more boomer than human.  That gesture can be taken a lot of
>>> differnt ways.
>>
>> And Sylia will take it whichever way best suits her ends. -sigh-
>> I'd rather just owe her later, it's cleaner >_<
>
> Well yes, but really Kari wasn't thinking that clearly about things at the
> moment.

She's had a rough day, after all :)

>>>> Kari managed to get Sylia to speak first, so that's a point to Kari. :D
>>>
>>> Actually I just decided that Sylia didn't care enough to draw things out
>>> further.  She recognized what Kari had done and decided she didn't want to
>>> try dealing with the 33-S but instead the person.  Drawing out a contest
>>> of wills against 33-S programing is meaningless.
>>
>> Yeah, but remember Kari is playing Sylia's game here, so Sylia still gave
>> Kari that point.
>> Or does Kari win the point herself, for getting Sylia to try to deal with
>> her as a person?
>
> You know, I'm not sure.  I hadn't actually thought it through to that
> level of overthinking things. :)

Hah. Yes, that's more analysis than one usually does when writing a 
story (and certainly the characters don't have time to for it) xD


>>>> Interesting... so what subject does she wish to discuss first?
>>>
>>> See, she wants to deal with Kari about Kari, not with a 33-S about other
>>> 33-S's
>>
>> :)
>> I think I was noting that Sylia just meant it's later on the agenda... and
>> then Kari seems to think she means it's not on the table at all.
>
> Thus once more proving that Kari doesn't have a great handle on Sylia.

I think Kari mostly knows that as well... especially after that meeting.

>>>> This may be the most humorous version of Sylvia I have ever seen. I
>>>> approve :)
>>>
>>> I was trying for a dry wit, I hope I succeeded.
>>
>> That is exactly how I'm reading it. Now quit making me identify with Sylia
>> so much! I can't afford a hardsuit!
>>
> Well do like Kari did.  Get your brain frozen, have an unscrupulous genom
> executive transfer your memories over into a prodoction model 33-S, and
> then go convince Sylia that your a rogue with a heart of gold.

I'd rather stay alive till then, but I'll see what I can do
;)

>> I intend to be here when you get the next one posted :)
>> (And don't forget to post the final version here so I can see what other
>> changes you made as well!)
>
> To be honest, I don't think there will be many changes at all,
> surprisingly to this chapter.  Mostly the silly edits you pointed out.
> I'll instead start working on the next chapter once I finish those today!

Hey, that's good too!
I know you have other pre-readers too, though, so I like to see what 
all gets in the final edit.

-Strike & Co.
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