[FFML] [Ranma] A Monsoon Souvenir

[Gary Kleppe]

Overall, this was very nice. Good characterization, and some good  
romantic moments without going overboard or being too sappy.

I especially liked the last scene on the beach. Good dramatic tension.  
The part on the plane I don't think was quite so good. It established  
the location and premise, but not much more than that. If it were me,  
I'd at least shorten that part, but obviously it's up to you.

I do think it would improve readability of you skipped a line between  
paragraphs and/or indent the beginning of each one. Probably you would  
need to turn off HTML formatting in your email client in order to do  
this. The list converts HTML to text and that often messes up  
formatting in unexpected ways.

Anyway, it was a pleasant read. Thanks for posting it.