[FFML] [C&C] [Crossover] A Once and Future Lori

[Mythril Moth]

Your *technical* skill at writing has vastly improved over the years. This 
was readable.

However, you need to learn the difference between an IDEA for a story and an 
ACTUAL STORY.

Like EVERYTHING ELSE YOU HAVE EVER WRITTEN EVER, this was a story just 
begun, and a promise of what's to come. But, LIKE EVERYTHING ELSE YOU HAVE 
EVER WRITTEN, you won't remain a soldier until the war is won.

Once, JUST ONCE, write an actual complete story. Before posting ANYTHING on 
the FFML ever again, try writing an actual complete story. One with a 
beginning, a middle, an end, and an actual plot.

But, LIKE YOU ALWAYS DO, you will ignore this advice, even though it's being 
offered genuinely and with the least possible amount of rancor.


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Mythril Moth
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