[FFML] Frozen Butterfly Arc 2 a story of Bubblegum Crisis

[J. w.]

Guy just can not seem to catch a break can he. First being dead. Then waking up as a women in a s-33 boomer body. then getting out and gets dragged back and tossed into a cyro unit. then some nut job drags him out of storage again not quite the right way and makes him a sex toy. I really could not offer much in the way of ways to improve the layout and writting of this chapter. You seem to hit the high points of coming out of a coma in a way being cold and wondering just what the hell happened to him. Its nice to see more of this story though. The one thing that does get me is who is fint going to turn out to be. Someone names that does sound like they where in the bgc series. I can not remember who it was.....i was thinking it is someone that was dealing with the japan defence force story arcs though. not sure if its the first couple of eps or if it is later where priss gets her but kicked by largo.
jason
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