[FFML] [Fanfic][Draft 1][Avengers/Marvel] Siblings, Spiders and Squirrels, oh my! Ch 2 - Doreen

[Timothy Miller]

It's been so long since Chapter 1 of this first surfaced that I'd almost 
forgotten about it. Generally it looks good to me - there's one 
formatting glitch (at least the way I received it) in what is otherwise 
THE best paragraph I've gotten to.

On 8/29/2012 4:43 PM, StudioPc wrote:
> "You want something to buy?" Tony leaned forward, elbows on knees, eyes hard. "Fine. My parents were killed in a car crash. My so called godfather had me in a succession of boarding schools followed by six years at MIT before hauling my butt off to Malibu where he bamboozled my happy ass into spending nearly twenty years of coming up with new ways to kill people. My parents wouldn't have won awards, but up until they died, I damn well had a home. But even if none of that applied, there's still this." Tony held up his hand to show Wilson his wedding band. "Pepper is Doreen's godmother, but I made promises when I put this on and Pepper's fight is my fight and I fight to win. I know what it means to be uprooted and tossed somewhere new and the least I can do is make damn sure that Doreen has access to a fair chance, the best schools, and a future, one that she chooses and the support she needs to make it happen. You worry about bad influences? She's down the hall from Captain Am
>   erica and a Norse God. Safety? We're the Avengers and as for money, I'm Tony Goddamn Stark. You buy that, Wilson?"

The formatting glitch in question is where "Am" "erica" got split apart. 
But other than that ... this paragraph made me grin ear-to-ear, and I 
can totally see Robert Downey Jr. delivering this to whoever would play 
social worker Sam Wilson.

(I approve of the character you picked to fill that slot, BTW. :) 
Completely believable.)

Like I said, looking good so far and I'm looking forward to reading more 
of this fic!

                 Tim Miller
                     timr.miller at verizon.net