[FFML] [fic] [Naruto] [SI] An American Contractor in Konoha Ch1

[outlawone1 at aol.com]

Darn thought I got all of those, guess I wasn't paying good enough attention.  I will go through the chapter again while I am at work today.  (playing RTO at the moment all I am doing is sitting at a radio relaying traffic).

I will also work on ch2 some more.

later,

Outlawone1








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From: Dot Warner <dotchan at dotchan.com>
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Subject: Re: [FFML] [fic] [Naruto] [SI] An American Contractor in Konoha Ch1


I haven't had a chance to re-read this part in detail yet, but a quick glance 
hrough it shows that you have some tense inconsistency problems, jumping into 
resent tense when the rest of the narrative is in past tense.
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