[FFML] [with some added some lime] Re: [Ranma] Like Something Out of a Movie

[DB Sommer]

Kris Overstreet wrote:
> At 05:26 PM 2/6/2009, you wrote:
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>> It had been like something out of a movie.
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> And it was a dark and stormy night.
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% Hey now, I started a chapter of a fic like that:

It was a dark and stormy night.

Well, that wasn’t exactly true. It was an overcast and drizzly 
afternoon, but that seemed too mundane for the seriousness of the 
mission. So Pink mentally took literary license to make the situation 
more dark and foreboding to set the proper mood. After all, she wanted 
people to read her memoirs, and at least one chapter was going to be 
devoted to her and Link’s journey of revenge against that awful 
Joketzusoku who had dared to ambush Link and disgrace her in front of 
the whole village. The cowardly bitch had the audacity to attack Link 
for no reason, strip her naked, tie her up, leave her in the middle of 
the village, and write on her backside “Professional slut taking on all 
comers. Enter here,” with arrows pointing to her pussy. While everyone 
had better sense than to take advantage of the situation, someone had 
taken pictures of her predicament. Despite the twins’ efforts, the 
photos were circulating everywhere. Everyone whispered behind Link’s 
back, and would shut up whenever she came around. Already she was 
talking about moving to another village once their mission of righteous 
vengeance was complete.

% Now that I've gotten my contrary nature out of the way, this was the 
sixth chapter, which means either I already got them with the proper 
hook or not. While the first sentence is the first impression you'll 
give the reader, usually you have a full paragraph to get the reader's 
interest. While you can get away with it sometimes, get the reader 
hooked as soon as possible, as well as setting the tone for what type of 
story it will be.