[FFML] [FIC][BtVS][SG-1][MAU] Repost: Worthless 1/?

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From: "Gandalf The Green" <torjones at cox.net>
> Worthless
> 
> Summary: Xander gets kicked out of the house at 16 and finds a new toy.
> 

Okay, huge red flag right off the bat. I freaking hate fics that turn Xander's parents into drunken serial abusers that throw him out of their house. They might be verbally abusive but it's a long step from that to throwing a minor into the streets. 

> Pairings: B/A, D/X/W
> 
> Warnings: Dawn exists, Buffy & Xander didn't make nice at the end of "When
> She Was Bad", and Buffy is still stressing over dying & not willing to tell
> Joyce & Dawn anything.
> 
More red flags. Dawn was introduced when she was for a reason. Just throwing her in because you want to does a disservice to the continuity of the series.  Also, the warning on Buffy and Xander not making nice, serious evidence of a bash fic at some level. Again, this does a disservice to the continuity of the series and does the characters a disservice. 

> Spoilers: None
> 
> Timeframe: Beginning of Second Season, just after "When She Was Bad."
> 

> MAU Notes: 
> 
Oy vey, I knew this sounded familiar. A mary sue device.  


> Xander walked in the front door to his house and noticed several empty beer
> bottles as well as a half bottle of tequila, something that he was fairly
> certain that they had been out of for quite a while. Tony only drank tequila
> when he was in a really bad mood. Xander instinctively ducked the first
> punch that came his way and rolled away to gain some room. Right about then,
> he realized that it was probably Tony Harris, his oh so loving father, and
> not some demon that was attacking him. This meant that the beating he was
> about to take wouldn't kill him, but would hurt a hell of a lot more.
> 
> Tony came at Xander again, and Xander's mood returned with a vengeance. Tony
> threw a wild swing, which never connected with anything besides air.
> Xander's shot to the solar plexus however landed rather hard, staggering his
> father. Xander followed up with a shot to the jaw and laid Tony out cold.
> 
Okay, stopping here.I read further on, but this ficis just plain awful. 

Xander, a 16 year old kid is punching and laying out Tony Harris, a grown man? Riiight. 

Were he Ranma Saotome or something I could see it, but he's a 16 year old KID, and one that bigger kids at school pick on. That should tell you something right off. 

Ditch the bashing, ditch the mary sue "I can have most anything I wish for" machine, and ditch the "badass" Xander can beat up his own father if he wants to stuff and try again. 
 
As it stands not only is the story saddled with trite fannon cliches of "ZOMGabused-Xander!", "ZOMGneglected-Willow", and anime references that are not in keeping with the characters themselves, but the characters aren't showing the least bit of caution or worry about mucking about in stuff that they should be worried about. Living in Sunnydale requires caution, or I should say "staying alive". The way this fic is written they are simply acting as living manikins who are showing off the author's "Oh gee isn't this new device cool" effect. Never make a story focus on a thing... make it about the people and how THEY act and react. 

 I'm sorry but as it is the story reads like a bad "author's wish fulfillment" fic than an actually interesting story that should be told.