[FFML] [Naruto/Slayers][XOVer]Hurricane Magic Prologue

[Matthew]

Well there's a few things that could do with some improvement.  The interaction between Naruto and Zel needs some refinement early on, but I'm not eloquent enough to be able to explain how without basically doing it for you.  The fact Zel's blue should cause a little more reaction, this isn't England during the era of the Roman Empire you don't see that many blue people running around.

The other thing is given Zel's manner of dress and that he usually does go into towns in the Slayersverse with nary a comment him not being willing to at least try to enter the village is stretching things.  Especially if he just sits in one area instead of continuing his quest to seperate a mixture of wine, juice, and water back into their component parts.

I can't recall there ever being a Hammer of Justice in Slayers, usually it's the Fists of Justice, Pacifist Fist, or Power of Justice in a speech.  Fireball practice in the middle of a forrest... even Lina considers that a big no-no.  Not to mention going from lighting to fireball without Flame arrow or otherwise...  Why not Wind Shamanism spells given the title?  The Bram Fang isn't as powerful although it has its uses, but given he's starting out immediately handing out the really destructive stuff is like teaching Amelia the Dragon Slave.  Given Zel appeared to have broken the kunoichi's neck or otherwise neutralized her and pwned her companions before the sudden scene change with Naruto waking up that whole sequence just doesn't make a whole lot of sense.