Subject: [FFML] Re: [C&C] Re: [Fanfic][Naruto] Suiren, Chapter 10: Release...
From: Aaron Nowack
Date: 1/2/2007, 11:19 PM
To: Eimii
CC: ffml@anifics.com

Eimii wrote:
Well, at least it isn't all her blood.  Well... not _this_ hers 
blood...
well... not this hers blood that wasn't contained in a different her
first...

Boy, this gets complicated fast.  :)

Bunshin are confusing enough before Sakura-chan gets her hands on 
them -_-;...

I swear, I am _this close_ to deciding that in every Naruto fanfic I
write from now on, Naruto will either never learn Kage Bunshin or not
have enough chakra to make more than one, _just_ so I will never again
have to find creative ways to distinguish between all the clones.

"Am I just a fuckin' toy ta you?" Temari guessed. She knew she'd 
crossed
the line as soon as the words left her mouth, but she was too tired 
to
care. "Is that how it is? Ya get ta kick me around 'n watch me do 
stupid
shit 'till I manage ta fuckin' kill myself? I'll bet it feels good ta 
be
on the other end 'a the-"

*wince* OUCH.

I wonder if it wasn't too early for Sakura/Temari to attack her like 
that; they've just been 'assigned' to each other that morning, after 
all...

Mmm... it's a tough call.

Temari-Sakura isn't terribly restrained, so I'd probably come down on
the side that she'd do it.

"And it's _my_ coat," Anko pointed out, grinning wolfishly as she
started working on the second button against Sakura's continued
resistance. "Wouldn't it be best to give it back before something in
there wakes up and decides to bite you?"

....my, Anko is being cruel today.  :)

She's got  an opponent that will play her game with her. She's probably 
overjoyed ^_^...

True.  :)

Frowning, Sakura pressed her hand deep into the plush red cushion 
under
her leg. *Why does this thing have to be so damn soft?* It didn't 
make
any sense; why _did_ Konoha's elite special forces unit keep such a
nice, comfy couch in the middle of their secret detention center?

For all the Monty Python jokes, of course.

Now picture Morino Ibiki singing the Lumberjack Song...

...
...
...

Is the repetition of "see the" intentional?

Ugh... no >_<;. This is a shining example of what happens more than half 
the time when i edit sentences. I replace the _wrong words_ and then 
don't even notice.

Been there; done that; got the T-shirt.


"A pervert? It's not _that_ weird a question, Sakura-chan. Unless... 
Do
you _like_ shy little Hinata-chan? And here I figured assertive girls
were more your type..."

"AAAAAAARGH! DAMMIT, Don't you ever _shut up?!_"

Anko: Nope!


'Cause it would be no fun if she did. Speaking of which, the 'no fun' 
capters are next, if i continue with the revisions... -_-;

As I recall, Sakura more than adequately covers for Anko.  :)

I'm glad to hear that the changes weren't too jarring. I'm honestly not 
sure if i would have changed anything, if i'd known that the ripples 
would be so far-reaching and would require so much extra work -_-;. Ah 
well... at least things are starting to settle down a bit. Gonna try and 
start working on whatever comes next in the next day or so. Wish me 
luck, and thanks for replying!

Luck, and you're welcome!

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