My name's Troy, and these are my comments. Hopefully they're more useful
then not.

Aaron Nowack wrote:

        The much older ninja smiled, and there was no pleasantness in
his expression.  "So nice to finally have a chance to talk, isn't it?"
he asked.

A bit jarring. Suggest,
and there was nothing pleasant in his expression

        "The way I understand it," Temari said, "the Rain used some
story about moving the reinforce the Waterfall against the Valley to get
close to the village.  Once they were inside..." Temari trailed off with
a shrug.

Something is missing there. Is it supposed to be...?
about moving to reinforce

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