I haven't been C&Cing things like I should, so here it goes.

        "Pumpkin, I wouldn't miss this for the world," Shego answered with a
chuckle.

Pumpkin.  Shego has a pet name for Kim.  I can no longer watch the
show w/o thinking of this.

        The one-eyed woman whirled towards the camera, scowling. "Kim Possible,
just what the FUCK do you think you're doing?!"

Dr. Director has lost her cool.  Anybody with a brain is either
getting the hell away from her or pissing their pants.

        Kim was almost as taken aback by the cursing as she was pleased by it.
She'd obviously rattled Dr. Director's cage pretty badly. "I already
told you that."

I can see LOTS of ways this could blow up in Kim's face.

        Kim stopped so suddenly that Shego had to take a half-step back to
avoid running into her. The redhead turned around, looking up at Shego
intensely, eyes boring right into the taller woman's.

<Romantic kiss (both of 'em) snipped>
You did a DAMN good job on that scene.  Its disturbing how good you
did that scene.  Not only can I visualize it in stunning detail, but
days later, I caught myself thinking of it as CANON.

        Doctor Bethany Director sat on her bed, chin resting on her laced
fingers, staring at the blank wall across from her.

The whole jigsaw puzzle thing was another good part.  You've managed
to breathe more life into this character than Disney ever did.

        'Except you've been obsessing over it for fifteen years. Obsessing
about it is what got you into this situation. Own up.'
        This was going to be one of those trite bits where her thoughts argued
against her, wasn't it?
        'Looks like.'

Oh god that's funny.  Small grammer nitpick though. Turn the 'was' to
'wasn't and the 'wasn't' to 'was'.

        'Give the kid DNAmy. She's not even a high priority villain. Kim'll
probably sit around, maybe boink Shego for a week or two, then she'll
calm down and go home, and life can get back to normal.'
        Or Kim might decide she liked the power, and getting her way through
threats, and her villainous girlfriend, and move on to full-scale
supervillainy.
        '... Well, okay, there's that possibility.'

This is pretty much the thoughts I've been having about this fic.

        "Just a tad curious as to what your next plan's gonna be."
        Kim blinked once. "Er, I'm sorry? I don't really understand..."
        "Well, you're a supervillain now, Miss Possible. Said so yourself. So,
assuming this supervillainous plan works out, what's your next one gonna
be?"

This got me thinking: where are Drakken's human employees?  He always
seemed to have a few of them.  Did they just quit after he turned up
dead.  The reason I'm asking is I'm having this funny scene in my head
where Monday rolls around, the henchmen come back to work, only to
find out they have new boss. :)

(Go ahead, use it if you want)

        Shego sprawled on her stomach on the bed, face buried in the pillow,
heavy breaths washing into the cloth and sinking down into it, making it
warm against her already heated skin.
        By now, it was becoming obvious that her animal self was driving not
only her senses and some of her emotions, but was very definitely a part
of her libido now. It had taken every ounce of self control she had to
walk away from Kim, and every ounce of energy she'd built up over her
time spent in bed trying to... assuage various aches.

BMI dude, BMI.  There are some places you should not go when the
source material is Disney.
         She knew she ought to take a cold shower, but she really hated cold

showers. In fact, despite her usual impatience with waiting for such
things, she hit the button set in the wall. Drakken was a sucker for
gadgetry, even non-evil gadgetry, and he'd picked this hideout because
the bathrooms had "convertible shower-baths", the floor of the shower
moving around, walls shifting slightly as it started changing into a
full-size bathtub. It took longer than just putting a plug in a drain,
but hey, it was great for attracting the bell-and-whistle obsessed sort
of supervillains.

Dammit!  Supervillains get all the cool sruff! :)

        "Ma'am, are you SURE about this?" Will wheedled.
        Dr. Director fought the desire to give him a dirty look. She was in a
foul enough mood that it would be an exceptionally mean look, and Will
still looked rather pale. He'd probably throw up.

Another thing I've liked:  You've managed to AVOID breathing any life
into Will Du.  Which is exactly appropriate IMHO.  The 'loyal
manserveant' works best when OUT of the limelight.

        "Please and thank you." Kim shut the channel, then hurried off down the
hallway towards the landing area. Before she got there, she forced
herself to slow up, turn her steps into longer strides, and tuck her
hands behind her back. Being a supervillain demanded a certain amount of
panache, after all.

Where did she get THAT from?  Exactly how many of her villain had "panache"?

        "Shut up," Kim repeated mildly. Again, Sucha shut up. "Let me be blunt.
I'm a supervillain. I don't care about the excuses you feed the world to
keep yourself from being bombed into your component molecules. I'm just
a very angry woman with a volcano-maker. And in that vein, if you
-don't- have control over those men on that plane, I suggest you find a
way to -get- them under control within the next two hours, unless you
want to take a very, very hot bath."

...That was ...
I'm speechless.

        "There's a young woman named Kim Possible. She used to be a hero.
Lately, she's been engaging in some... very unsavory activities. They've
now elevated to terrorism, with her making demands of a country's
highest elected official, using the threat of violence if he doesn't
comply."

Well, that's one way of putting it.  I get the impression the good
Doctor isn't all there anymore.

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