Subject: [FFML] Re: [Draft 1][DP/GB] Return of the Phantom -Chapter 2
From: "The Eternal Lost Lurker" <lurkerdrome@sbcglobal.net>
Date: 9/21/2006, 12:12 PM
To: "FFML" <ffml@anifics.com>, "StudioPC" <studiopc@sbcglobal.net>


"There is no need. Skulker was merely a messenger." The wall screen
turned on and began playing a loop of the Phantom's last words to
Skulker. Plasmia reached up one hand and touched the screen, gloved
fingertip tracing the lines of Phantom's nose and lips. "And the message
has been delivered."

A black gloved fist shattered the screen with a single blow as the
chamber filled with laughter. But the sound loop continued to play.

"Who's Plasmia? Who's Plasmia? Who's Plasmia? Who's Plasmia? Who's
Plasmia? . . ."

PENALTY for ripping that entire sequence off wholesale from Teen Titans.

Other than that...decent start for the chapter, but it needs a lot of polish
and it feels a bit lean.

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