Robert Atendido wrote:

 > A couple of quick comments (my two cents, take it or leave it as you 
will)
 >
 >
 >> "Blue - Orange contact!"  "Confirmed!"  Two unfamiliar men said.
 >
 >
 >
 > "Confirmed!" two unfamiliar men said.
 > -->Do not capitalize after a quote, if you are continuing the sentence.
 >
 > Also, I would've split this up a bit:
 >
 > "Blue - Orange contact!" announced an unfamiliar voice.
 > "Confirmed!" replied someone else.
 >
 > ...or something like that.
 >

Correct style in writing conversations is that a change of
speaker is *always* marked by a new paragraph.


-- 
              Christopher Mattern

"Which one you figure tracked us?"
"The ugly one, sir."
"...Could you be more specific?"

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