--- William Lathan <zoomorph@gmail.com> wrote:
First off, we both know this has been done before. Alot. Yours is
refreshingly original so far. Keep the originality and I'll keep
commenting.
Thanks.
That particular morning was disrupted by a jogger. It took less than a
second
to recognise the tall girl in an expensive looking green jogging-suit (the
pink
trim and embroidered astrological marking was less a giveaway than the
green
eyes and chestnut ponytail). As a body, the press corps made way as she
slowed
to a walk directly through them, for most of the locals had learned from
the
Jupiter shifts
*shifts*?
....
"shifts"? This is some obsessive coverage here.
What were you expecting? Staid restraint when covering thier private lives?
that civility would be rewarded by civil behavior (a curt "No
Comment." and a glare at worst)....
"Miss Jupiter! Ken Takizawa, FOX Ne-*urk*"
*WHAM*
*CRUNCH*
"<owie!>"
I can only imagine what this would look like from a TV viewer's perspective.
Sean Penn revisited?
She was never certain what kept her from confronting her outright or
conciously
making the link between the other senshi and Ami's four friends, but the
medical supplies and field medicine guides the Doctor left laying about
their
apartment was enough of a hint for both.
THIS is original. The mommy knows AND the senshi knows the mommy knows.
Both are very bright, and I never figured Ami's mother to be much more
forthright than Ami when she did not have to be.
Dr. Mizuno knew, Ami knew Dr. Mizuno
knew, and frank discussion would have come in it's own time if it were not
for
that camera crew covering the demon attack at the soccer championship.
Piece of advice: Don't EVER write that scene out. There's no way you
could make it original enough to match shat you've already done.
Sometimes less is more.
(Usagi-chan was a dear for loaning her that 'disguise pen', and she was
guilty about running it through the MRI machine even if it was pointless),
*snort*
and when the cram school asked her to leave
she gave up altogether.
ouch.
The really bad part is that it was the press instead of the monster that was
the tipping point....
Even when her friends and comrades-at-arms came for
anything less than an emergency it often took the better part of an hour to
coax her out of her darkened room, and often it was easier to watch movies
in
the living room.
Here's a few things to think about: (take 'em or leave 'em at your
discretion)
The effect on Luna & Artemis - nobody has ever covered that
before. No nation in the world would ever give civil rights to a CAT,
so they instantly become fair game for reporters, souvenior hunters,
stalkers and breeders.
I would think after the frist few times something like that blew up in thier
faces, literally*, word would get around.
(*: V-chan's Ininerary canceled, looking for Lost Cat
<cue explosion somewhere in town>
Don't you love Locator Beacons?)
And that _is_ assuming that the Senshi do not manage to keep things about them
quiet, although the moon-thing on the foreheads would be a problem.
The manga version of Ami was allergic to love letters. This has
GOT to be worth a few paragraphs of funny.
Oog.
Rei is a shinto priestess. How would the Shinto religion regard Rei
now?
Depends mainly on how much of their Past&Future the Senshi are prone to blab
about. If the whole story came out they would have a better-than-even chance
of ending up on the run outright)
Mecury, Venus, Moon, Mars, Jupiter... somebody's gonna start
looking for the Outers. Are they already 'outed'?
I am thinking something along that line....
Headlines: "ChibiMoon Is From The Future!"
V-chan's Press Statement: "_Time_ travel? Where's the hunky cyborg then?"
HTG
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