Elsa Bibat wrote:

Heck, Bucky and Uncle Ben are back from what I last heard! Anyway, in
what promises to be a fun romp Luna brings back Gwen and Prof. Tomoe is
at New York!!

I'll actually read this for the insanity factor - but it seems it's
being played for seriousness, which is a bit of a downer. How about
making it more crazy? Silver Age comics were on crack and you have to
preserve the tradition.

Anyway, a bit short and a bit lacking on any hooks that would actually
get the reader to just stay on reading it. Write longer parts or rather
release contained arcs like the old one-issue comics of old.

Needs a bit of work before I recommend it.

I'm thinking I may just drop the entire first part and make Part Two 
(with Gwen waking up the start).  I can always stick Felicia's little 
joke about Morganstern into dialogue with Gwen.  The truth is, this 
started as a funny idea, but I'm not sure I can bring the funny any 
more. The couple of Ranma series that I used to do lie fallow for just 
that reason.  The deaths of my parents stopped my writing and commenting 
and even though I've started again I feel grimmer than I used to.  In 
retrospect perhaps it was a mistake to start with Gwen Stacy's death 
even though I've reversed it.  That was after all the most memorably 
tragic storyline in comic history.



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