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From: hmelton@ameriwave.net [mailto:hmelton@ameriwave.net]
Sent: 7/27/2006 1:20:24 AM
To: uswong@palaunet.com
Subject: Re: [FFML] [Ranma - Jedi Knight: Jedi Academy][Chapter 4]
Hello
Hey!
This was a pretty good chapter, but for me at least the portrayal of
Ranma in this chapter didn't quite feel right.
How so? Is it because I've made him a bit more chatty?
I could possible see him acting this way under the soul of ice, but
you probably need to give more buildup.
Hmm, you mean more buildup in the previous chapters? The final revisions of them are underway; I'd like suggestions on how I could accomplish this.
I've never been satisfied with the way most describe Ranma under the
effects of the Soul of Ice technique. I think the down side should
be Ranma acts cold not evil just cold get the job done that has to be
done without any respect for emotions his or others.
That said this chapter's Ranma feels disjointed to the previous
chapters version.
Disjointed? Well, he is talking a bit more in this one isn't he? And the scene with Xi-an Phu, he really was convinced she was a threat so that's the reason why he tried to, ahem, execute her on the spot. He wasn't attempting it for fun's sake :D.
Wasn't Ranma using the soul of Ice technique in his battle with
Akane?
Yup, it's been 'on' 24 hours ever since chapter 0.
If so then this Chapter's Ranma doesn't seem to be acting like last
chapters Ranma.
More clarification, if you please!
I guess this could be another aspect of Ranma's past training coming
out.
This Starwars version of Ranma hasn't quite had the same childhood as
the Ranma of Earth and their lives are only approximate analogues of
each others.
Righty-o!
You have hinted about Ranma's overload in the force and I've been
building guesses around the thought that this Universe's analogue of
Ranma's father used creatures with a huge potential in the force to
train ranma at a young age instead of the the pit full of cats.
I won't tell for sure, but that's a good guess.
howard melton
Dave Wong
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