On 20/07/2006, at 11:35 PM, Scott Jamison wrote:

    "Come on, Martin, I know you miss your mother, but you know why
she couldn't be here."  Mr. Weasley pushed his son forward.  "Say
hello to Duncan....did you say 'Dursley?'"

No, nobody did.  ^_^

    Duncan turned to see it was indeed a girl, about his age, with
messy black hair tied off with a red ribbon.  She had a pleasant,
open face with rosy cheeks and a friendly expression.  Of course, the
rosy cheeks might have come from running, and she was breathing
heavily.

    "Uh, hi."  She seemed familiar.  "Didn't I see you flying a
broomstick in Diagon Alley a couple of weeks ago?"

    "You...saw that?  Yes, but I think I'm getting the hang of it
now.  Maybe I can even make the Quidditch team someday.  Oh, I'm
Kirsten Kinnock, and this is my cat Jinx."  The girl indicated a
black cat that was emerging from behind her.

Aha.  Now I understand your somewhat noncommittal reply before. :)
Descendent of Kiki, then.  Interesting idea.

    It seemed that the other children were similarly impoverished,
with Kirsten having the most discretionary funds.  They pooled their
Knuts and bought two items each.  There was much haggling over who
got how much of which thing, though Martin didn't take any of the
All-Flavor Beans.

So has the brand name changed?  They used to be Every-Flavor.

    Polishing off the candy, the children started talking about
Quidditch.  Apparently it was a sport played on broomsticks, with
multiple balls, some of which attacked the players.  It sounded
horribly confusing to Duncan, but then he couldn't figure out cricket
either, and he'd *played* that.

Hmm, it would be rather refreshing to have a character who *wasn't*
a god at Quidditch.

     "Hullo, Martin.  My, you're eating like a pig, aren't you?  Or
perhaps I should say 'like a Dursley?'"  Richard had that nasty smile
on his face again.

     Martin paled and shrank against the seat.

Hmm, obviously something interesting to be revealed about Martin
there.


... Well, it remains strong and well-written.  As before, looking
forward to more.

Cheers,
Angus

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