Yay!  New chapter!

they'd been playing since Sakura had woken hours earlier, naked and
alone in an empty room somewhere deep within the bowels of ANBU's
torture and interrogation facility.

Huh.  Too bad this isn't an anime episode.

At least, that's where Sakura assumed they were. The endless miles
corridors that she'd been wandering through were probably just an
elaborate genjutsu that the examiner was using to torment her. The
simpler versions of such techniques- the ones that could be maintained
for hours on end -depended on having a homogenous environment for the
victims to wander in, such as poorly-lit forest path or a series of
specially prepared rooms with no telltale features to distinguish one

>from the next... much like these halls, with their drab gray plaster

walls, half burnt-out ceiling lamps and heavy, black metal doors.

Hm.  In episode 67, which kicked off the invasion of Konoha by Orochimaru 
and the Sound and resulted in the death of the third, Kabuto and the others 
used a genjutsu technique to put almost everyone to sleep.

Except Sakura.  Sakura realized what it was and dispelled it for herself 
without prompting.  She was later instructed to dispel it for Naruto as 
well.  Well, and Shikamaru as well, but he had already dispelled it for 
himself.

So if she thinks she's in a genjutsu now, why isn't she at least *trying* 
to dispel it?  It's possible that she doesn't know the exact technique 
(though I doubt it, see below), but it seems logical that she would at 
least know of it and some more rudimentary ways to either counter it or at 
least confirm she's under genjutsu.  That incident is only a few weeks away 
now in the current timeframe.

(The dispel technique is an easy one to do - it consists of one hand seal 
(Tora) and one word 'Kai' (which they translate as 'dispel').  I can't 
imagine that a genin as talented in chakra control and likely in genjutsu 
would not have been instructed in this pretty much at the beginning of 
their training or at some point in school.)

Basically, this can probably be handled by a short note to the effect of 
having tried it and it not being successful, or something along those 
lines?

Other than that, I have no real complaints or comments.  I just sat back 
and enjoyed reading it. :)


Joel 

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