--- Cute Neko Hibiki <wbanks@jam.rr.com> wrote:

    Ranma and Ryoga were walking down a road, and

were very close

very close to their 
destination.

    "We're almost there Ryoga." said Ranma.

Comma after there

    "Yeah." said Ryoga.

    In a little while they passed through the city
gate.

    "We;re here Ryogaa! We made it! Yeah!" shouted

"We're here, Ryoga!

Ranma.

    "But where do we go to find the place we're
looking for?" asked Ryoga.

    "Let's ask that city guard." said Ranma pointing
to a guard.

    They walked up to the guard and asked her.

    "Excuse me ma'aam? Do you know where the Church

ma'am

is?" asked Ranma.

    The guard looked at them and said "The Church is
that way." while 

that way," while

pointing to the other side of the city.

    "Great, more walking." said Ryoga.

"Great, more walking," complained Ryouga (suggestion)

    "Ah c'mon, we're almost there." said Ranma.

Replace first period with a comma

    "You can take a cab." said the guard. Then she

Replace first period with a comma

blinked. "Oh, and yeah, 
welcome to Prontera, the capital city of our great
Kingdom of 
Rune-Midguard."

To Be Continued...

Interesting.  Can't really comment until I see chapter
1 though :D 

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