Another week, another load. Sorry about the delay but had a bit of business
to take care of.
Anyway, here we go...
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Series: Ranma 1/2 - Star Wars Jedi Knight / Jedi Academy
Title: The Jedi of Chaos
Chapter: 2
Author: David Wong
Web site: http://www.geocities.com/darksoar/start
Genre: Crossover, Adventure
Status: Just finished
Synopsis: Introducing two of the villains Allura and Crimson!
On their way to the Massassi temple, Ranma and Rosh get separated.
Meanwhile, the people left behind in the shuttlecraft are being tortured by
good nurse Aserna...
Review:
Let me repeat again that I am leery of Star Wars. I think it's because of
George Lucas' facial hair.
Anyway, you really have to do something about your formatting. I recommend
using Reform [http://www.motoslave.net/reform/] by Thomas Edwards -
definitely adds something to the presentation and makes it easier on the
eyes. Haven't checked there lately but if it's, gone e-mail me and I'll send
you a copy.
Pacing seems a bit strange - maybe a little too fast. That and the frequent
scene breaks seem to contribute to my mental confusion. Plus, the humor
seems to be awkward at times - try to aim for a uniform tone for an entire
chapter, or if you really want to make a joke, make it flow seamlessly into
the prose - like a wisecrack or something less physical.
Writing is good, though: descriptive and the fight sequences were nice -
though you have to break the habit of the ellipses - it may read "cool", but
the scene could have been better served by flowing description than simple
technical tricks (not that tricks are bad, but tricks are best when they're
subtle).
Overall, a decent enough fic - just doesn't grab me, though. Better blame it
on my SW hate.
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Series: Rune Soldier
Title: A True Champion Is...
Chapter: 1-4
Author: Dragon-Stiel Inc.
Web site: None
Genre: Action/Humor
Status: In progress
Synopsis: Louie is far from the perfect embodiment of a Champion, but when
the Magician's guild becomes infested with demons, it looks like the Rune
Soldier has finally found his ticket to Hero status. Of course, this is
Louie we're talking about...
Review:
Now this is what I'm talking about!
A fine piece of work set in a fine, yet often overlooked, series. I watched
Mahou Senshi Rui during the original broadcast run and just fell in love
with the setting and characters, the Slayers-lite tone being a great tonic.
Anyway, what can I say? The fic has that satisfying mix of banter, action
and humor of the original work. The pacing of the fic in bite-sized chapters
serves it well - the fic will probably approximate an entire episode when
done and that's fine.
How can I improve on perfection?
Maybe a request for more and the use of Tom Edward's Reform to format the
entire thing probably? And a nice little read over to spot the punctuation
mistakes?
That's all and you really should post more of this!
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Series: Ranma 1/2, Super Mario Bros.
Title: Out of the frying pan and into the fire.
Chapter: One shots
Author: Z�riHB / KawaiiImoto-e
Web site: http://zuerihb.googlepages.com
Genre: spamfic, comdey
Status: complete
Synopsis: After falling down a pipe, it just get's worse.
Review:
A little bit of fluff. Concept is "meh" and it didn't even make me crack a
smile.
This could definitely use a rewrite and a grammar check, if you're serious
in continuing this. I would advise going over it again - seriously.
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Series: Naruto
Title: Secrets and Lies
Chapter: One shot
Author: Aaron Nowack
Web site: http://www.mimiru.net/
Genre: Comedy/Parody
Status: Being revised.
Synopsis: Naruto has a secret. So does Sasuke. And Sakura. Just how were
the genin teams picked again?
Review:
Aaron Nowack takes a break from Hundred Days, probably one of the finest
pieces of Naruto fanfic on the planet, and does a nice little funny fic.
Now, _this_ is funny. This is comedy. You know why?
Because there's a set-up. Then there's a punchline. And the writing makes it
funny and the timing is great.
And if you think that's easy, remember: drama is easy, _comedy_ is hard.
Now use the formatting you use for Hundred Days, Aaron. The messy lines make
my head hurt.
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Series: Ranma, Evangelion, H.P. Lovecraft, Ah! My Goddess
Title: Sic Semper Morituri
Chapter: Chapter 53 - Dimmed Fereigners
Web site: http://home.att.net/~danjess.gibson
Genre: Fusion, Psychological, Drama, Horror
Status: Complete, I believe. A rewrite is planned.
Synopsis: Nabiki must deal with the unexpected aftermath of the battle at
Roswell and the attack on Asuka. Ranma seeks ways to help Asuka and fight
the real enemy, an enemy he cannot use his normal strengths against. Rei
continues to work to engineer the return of Mein GrossfeldMarschall. The
command staff seek their own answers and solutions to the problems. The
Twins make its move against the pilots. Maya begins negotiations to allow
the unthinkable.
Review:
In all seriousness, I really should like Dan Gibson's works more. I mean,
great quotes, engaging prose, funky alternate histories - what is not to
like?
Maybe because I didn't write it - and he writes faster than me.
May Cthulhu eat you, Dan Gibson!!!
Anyway, another recommended chapter - though be advised that this is not
exactly everybody's cup of tea. I'm not even sure it's my cup of tea, yet
I'm reading it.
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Series: Ranma 1/2, Duck Tales
Title: Everyone has a master
Chapter: One shot
Author: Z�riHB / KawaiiImoto-e
Web site: http://zuerihb.googlepages.com
Genre: spamfic, comedy
Status: complete
Synopsis: Negotiating is every business person's number one skill.
Review:
Reading numbers is not fun - nor is it comedy.
Really.
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Series: Teikokukakagekidan 1940 (Sakura Wars AU/Megacrossover)
Title: Hypocritic Oath
Chapter: One Shot
Author: C. Richard Davies
Web site: http://www.geocities.com/cricharddavies/
Genre: Dark/War/Drama/Fantasy/Medicine
Status: Complete
Synopsis: In a different 1941, Dr. Charles McNichol, a disgraced magic-using
surgeon, is summoned to work on a top secret project for the U.S.
government. In the process, he discovers some terrible truths about the
world, and about himself.
Review:
I originally read Chris Davies' piece on the TK1940 boards and my opinion
does not change - it is a great holy piece of work that only he could write.
You don't even need that much background in TK1940, all the info you need is
there.
Anyway, a great introductory piece for anyone interested in the TK1940
project and a great fanfic, overall.
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Editorial:
Wouldn't It Be Fun If...
No, do not continue that thought. There lies the path to perdition.
That's a fanfic writer's starting thought and usually the one that dooms
him/her; the old 'What-if'.
It's great to play with ideas and the imaginative exercise of exploring
possibilities has often led to great fanfic - and it has led to horrible
fanfic.
First of all, not all ideas work - the reason you don't see a particular
fanfic concept is sometimes that reason. Yeah, some are fun for nice little
spamfics that are fun. Some insist on taking these clunky ideas on the road
for longer fanfic and they fall apart.
Second, the people who get the ideas don't have the ability to make it work
- that's why we have a thousand false starts on ff.net.
Third, people like reinventing the wheel. That's why we also have the ten
thousand of thinly-veiled "Alt-Universe" high school fics on ff.net.
Remember that when playing in the sandbox, kids.
Anyway, see you again next week for another SLR!!!
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