"Oh, wow!  Carlina Val Cassanda?  She's incredible!

Heh.  Tighten that screw:  Usagi going fan-crazy
about Rei's long-time enemy...

   Yup.  I think Rei's gotten off fairly easy so far in terms of her
past.  No matter how reformed she is, she was once one of the top
Sisters in her order.  Usagi, having been raised by the White Order, is
bound to have a very different view of Alieva's crew than Rei does, and
there are bound to be emotional landmines lurking just under the surface
waiting for the unwary to blunder into them.

   You know I hadn't really thought about it in that way, but I can see it 
now that you mention it.

Alternatively, you might just have the real key give
Ranma a tug; presumably, once aligned with it, it
gives Ranma notice of outbreaks of the Dark or
something.

   There are only certain things the key reacts to at this point.
Succubi may be bad news, but they're more small dark than big Dark, if
you know what I mean.

   At this point... intentional word choice? If so, very interesting indeed.

He may have come here from beyond the Zero Limit."
    "Oh, my," Hild breathed, turning the full force
of her derisive amusement upon the girl.  "That's
the thread of hope you've chosen to cling to?  You
were there, my dear.  You saw space and time rent
asunder by forces beyond the control of even those
you served.  There are no longer any worlds beyond
this sphere's Zero Limit.  This is it, Peorth.
This is all that remains."

   You know, I can't help but wonder, what is the main draw for the 
hyperlink key to the players that want it? Obviously from most people's 
point of view it's primary function is worthless, (as I understand it) from 
all the talk about the Zero Limit. So, what makes it so desirable?

and mass?)  And the Voice's plan is darker yet?  We
don't know if the Voice accepts the premise that only
this sphere remains.

   I can honestly say that you will definitely find out next chapter
whether or not you are right.

Heh.

Also, I'm not sure we yet know WHY wynneth thinks she
needs all the Senshi.  Presumably they play a part in her
plan, but in what way?  Previously we'd been given to
understand that Wynneth has specific plans for Hotaru.

   Yes, need is different from want.  They are powerful, and definitely
would be valuable assets for a new vampire-goddess, but is that all, or
do they play a larger role in her schemes?

Tease. :)

In fact, where is the Voice?  Busy perhaps?  Its
attention preoccupied by, say, the prayers of its
followers, suddenly subject to a unprecedented
attack?

   It's in a bad cell.  "Can you hear me NOW?"

Snrk!

    "A tower," Hild sighed, a feeling of dread
settling over her.  "Silkaine's stronghold within
Vasta Min.  The rumours were true."

Heh.  Gee, why did we somehow suspect that Vasta
Min wasn't such a conspiracy theory after all?
So much for Mars' being the perceptive one regarding
ancient history...

   There'll be no living with Minako if this gets out.  And Rei hates
being wrong.

So, if there is any justice in the world, it WILL get out. <EG>

   She believes it.  We know that they're all wrong, of course.  Wonder
what will happen if they find out where Ranma's really from?

Oh, that's BOUND to be interesting.

Records from the period between the disappearance
of the Keymakers and the rise of the Wardens were
sketchy, unreliable, as chaos had overtaken
civilisation.

Heh.  Nice echoes of Rei's and Ami's musings back
in chapter 9, except with a vastly expanded time
scale.  We're probably talking hundreds of thousands
of years here.

   Yes, a very long timeline indeed.  Lots of room for stories in
there, let me tell you.

^_^

   V speculated that it might be the name of one of the Underlords,
given its location, but there was no real evidence to support that.  The
only way the two might be reconciled is if the Underlords, or some of
them, were descendents of those ancient regulators who preceded the
Wardens.  Hmmmm ...

Interesting.

   You are right in the first instance.  She was in the palace's crisis
centre, her order was to get everyone off the watch and under cover.
For all the good that might have done.  As for the second, her ultimate
fate remains to be seen ...

I'd hate to see her bite it, but the story goes where it wills more often 
than not.

   Thank you for taking the time once again to C&C these two chapters.
I'm hard at work on the next chapter, and it promises to be a doozy.

Whoah! That coming from you is just plain scary!

Not in a bad way, but still....

--
Druid

"You don't need a reason to help people"
Zidane, FFIX 



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