"Sir Kaoru?" Miyabi asked, when she saw his expression as he
watched Aoi leave.  She couldn't be sure, but he had the wounded
look of a man about to do something rash.

Incidentally, I'm not feeling the Westernised modes of address.

Especially

under the circumstances--the story being about rampant Japanese

xenophobia

in a staunchy highly-placed Old Japanese Family, NOT seeing honorifics

like

"Kaoru-dono" and "Aoi-sama" is VERY jarring.

Jarring, perhaps, but it's true to the Anime canon.

No it isn't. Unless all you've watched is the dub.

 I can't recall any
time when Miyabi didn't
address him as 'Sir Kaoru'.

I can. Because I watched it subbed. And she calls him 'Kaoru-dono'.

 I know that's probably a lousy translation
for Western audiences
but I try to hear the characters' voices when  I write and a Japanese
honorific wouldn't
sound right.

Yes it would. If you'd bothered to watch it the way it was meant to be
watched. :/

But we're probably going to end up agreeing to disagree on this one.

I'm trying to stay true to an interpretation of the Sakuraba clan.  The
women of the clan are the real
power.  That's why Miyabi is so careful in preparing Aoi.  She wants the
girl to assume that power
and realizes that Kaoru is the key to Aoi's development.
(I admit, this is not explicitly spelled out in the Anime.  It's just my
interpretation of various stages of the plot.)

Fair enough.

    Sitting up with Steven's help, she groaned and tottered in
the seat.  "How long have I been asleep?  Where are we?  What
time is it?"

"Are we there yet?"

And why are my panties in your hand?
[ Geez, now you've got ME doing it. ]

Heheheheheheheh. >:)

    "Oh.  Where are we going?" she asked, trying a few
experimental steps.  Pain shot up from her ankles directly into
her hips, causing her to grunt and grab for a seat back.

"Last time I have sex hanging from the ceiling..."

You're going to make me write a lemon, aren't you?

You KNOW you want to.

< big snip >

[Steven] "OW! Dammit, what are you, Loretta Bobbitt?"

Good chapter. Lots of fun character stuff, very well done.

Thanks, Lurk!  I appreciate the read and the comments.

Anytime.

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Please do not stare at my crotch.

It wasn't me!  That was Tina.

Now SHE can stare at my crotch as much as she wants. h.h

(So long as I can return the favor, of course...n.n;;)

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