Okay, it's been pointed out the people no longer C&C as much as they used
to, which is contributing to the demise of the FFML. Since I'm as guilty
of that as the next guy, I figured I'd C&C one of the few stories I've
actually _read_ in the past several months.

I don't really have time for something detailed, though.

Overall, I liked the story. Very good character development, good
mood-setting. The action was very clear, which is unusual in a story with
significant amounts of combat.

It does need to be proof-read a little more thoroughly, as Morgan pointed
out, there were several places where you seemed to be missing a word, or
used the wrong word when you obviously meant something else.

I will be visiting the forum to read the other stories, I very much
enjoyed this one.

Have you considered talking to the Undocumented Features people? They have
some experience in large multi-author multi-fandom crossovers, and they
might be interested in this. Some of them are even familiar with all of
the fandoms in question (at least, all of the fandoms I recognized).
If you haven't read UF in a couple of years, you should check it out --
the quality of writing has come up considerably from its beginnings.

-Craig

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