Well, I've settled into married life and being a full time mom of three 
wonderful step-children (ages 9, 12 and 14), my difficult pregnancy 
(including 6 weeks of bed rest thanks to toxemia) is long over, I no longer 
need physical therapy for the car accident I was in back in February, and 
I've gotten rather adept at typing one-handed while holding a six-month old 
baby on my lap.

So I guess I'm out of excuses, especially after my little spate of activity 
on the list today.  Here's some C&C.

----- Original Message ----- 
<snip>

"You should tell her."

He looked up at her, and smiled a small, strange smile. "I think I will,
maybe...as soon as I can." Then, he gave her a sly look. "What about you,
neechan? Do you like somebody? Maybe Shinichi-niichan?"

Heh.  Little manipulator.....

<snip>

*Barou...they'd be in danger anyway. It's not like those guys would leave
the people who know me alone if they found out I wasn't dead...*

It's been a while since I've watched my fansubs, but "barou" really threw 
me.  From your use of it in this fic, I know it must be Shinichi's catch 
phrase, like Kenshin's "Oro," or Sasuke's "Dobe."  I can only presume that 
it means something like "idiot" or "stupid."  Normally, I don't mind the use 
of Japanese in anime fanfiction, but this confused me, and I'm a Conan fan.

<snip>

"Actually..." The shrunken detective coughed. "Right now...letting
go...would be good..."

Ran blinked. "Eh?"

"Suffocating...breasts..."

"Eep!" The tall girl's face reddened like a tomato, and she very nearly
flung the boy across the room. "Shinichi! Don't say perverted things like
that..."

He rolled his eyes at her. "Don't try to kill me with those things, then."

"You little..."

"Eep!"

Heheh!  So totally could see this happening.

The ensuing chase lasted for several minutes, and ended in a fierce tickle
fight. When at last both had exhausted their energy, Ran lay sprawled on 
the
floor, with the diminuitive form of Shinichi laying on her stomach, her 
arms
encircling him protectively.

Aww...

<snip>

And so ended the first night of Shinichi's strange new life as a small boy
named Edogawa Conan.

*But,* he mused as he drifted off to sleep in the arms of the girl he 
loved
more than anything in the world, *at least I'm not alone...*

Not really much to say in the way of criticism.  It's a very nice what-if 
fic, and very plausible.  What a different series it would be if Shinichi 
had told Ran the truth from the very beginning.  Are you planning to explore 
this scenario further by any chance?  It's perfect as a one-shot, but I 
confess, you've piqued my curiosity, and I'd like to see more.

-Krista 


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