An attempt at writing a fic in 500 words or less.

*sigh*  Maybe next time....

Heh.

     Duo dressed in red for the mission. Everything he wore was
dark, deep red, from his velvet vest and tailed coat, to his trim
slacks, to his silk shirt with the fall of lace at his throat and
cuffs, right down to the ribbon that tied off the end of his
braid.

Whee for anachronistic and questionable-sexuality wardrobe! XD

     Everything red... except the stark bone-white ivory mask
that covered the upper part of his face.

How sad is it that my FIRST reaction to "bone-white ivory mask" is "Hollow"?

     "Maybe," he said, "but anyone who might recognize me also
knows that I'm just a poor L2 street rat -- one who's only known
starvation and disease and war. I'm the last person they'd expect
to be able to infiltrate high society."

Lovely, he thinks he's Zorro.

     If nothing else, reading Poe gave me insight into Duo's
unique flair for the dramatic; not to mention his biting, dark
sense of humor.

Technical comment: I'd swap "biting" and "dark" here. "dark, biting" sounds
more natural.

*snip* Nice work.

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