Somebody said that I should be commenting more, even if it's not on  
spelling and grammer, sooo . . .

On Jun 14, 2006, at 7:15 AM, Andrew Wilson wrote:

Every
grub, when he is evolves to a sentient stage, is show the betrayal."

"You're not talking a video," Tenchi commented.  Something in Tesla's
voice almost suggested a personal account

It should be "Shown the betrayal".

Other than that, nothing really leapt out at me.


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