Went through and read what lurker said. All I have to say is that if english 
is not your first language or if your language skills suck, get a native 
english speaker to pre-read this story for you. I found myself skipping 
sentances rather then reading the horid writing. At least this needed a 
[draft] warning becuase even if this was an origonal idea, it is NOT READY 
for you to torture others with this story.

Also, please put a warning if you are going to have a graphic description of 
random man-meat in the opening. That bothered me too.

Numair



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