On Sun, 30 Oct 2005 03:44:18 -0600, Rann Aridorn <rannaridorn1@gmail.com> wrote:

[Cuteness195] We've been talking for a little while now, I guess.
[Tallgirl1] Yeah.
[...]

This piece was much better than I expected, sorry for low expectations.
Chatfic format threw me off.

There is not much I can mention in detail, the piece is quite round.
Maybe just this:

[Cuteness195] That sounds so familiar.
[Cuteness195] Like someone I should know!
[Tallgirl1] You?
[Cuteness195] Oh, I'm kind of little, I guess! I skipped a bunch of 
grades, and even then I'm smaller than most people I know!

The "You" here is more likely to be interpreted as an invitation
to explain the previous remark rather than to describe herself.

Also, I have a question.

[Cuteness195] What?! Tell me!!
[Tallgirl1] You just described Chiyo Mihama.
[Cuteness195] .
[Cuteness195] what

Is the change to the lower case from this point on significant for
the story?

-- Pete

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