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Since the first two seem to have gone over well enough, 

here's another:

"...and we have to find out how to cure it, doc! Akane's 

life depends 

on it!" Ranma gasped.

"So Cologne thinks that a pressure point controlling 

breathing was hit 

by accident? That is serious," Doctor Tofu said with a frown of 
concentration.
 

% Hmm. A bit more serious in tone.

	Granted, but I'll keep it this way because it appeals to the
anti-Akane among us. It was a bone deliberately thrown their way because I'd
treated Akane so sympathetically in Impression One.

"Yeah. She has to concentrate on breathing all the time, because she 
can't do it unconsciously." Ranma pounded on the doorframe a 

few times, 

trying to release a little of the stress he was feeling. 

"What a stupid 

thing to happen! Slipping while trying to help me out of the 

pond and 

falling on a rock!"

"Well, I'm sure we can fix the problem. I know for a fact 

that one of 

the books I keep in the waiting room has information about the chi 
pathways that control breathing.

% Odd that he would leave a book like that there.

	I don't have a floor plan for the clinic, but it's shown to be
pretty small in the illustrations. I thought it would be reasonable that he
might keep a bookcase there, and it kept me from having to have Kasumi
actually walk in.

"Hello? Ranma? Did you find the doctor?"

The sound of that voice caused Tofu's glasses to immediately cloud 
over, and a cloud

% overuse of cloud. fog for the first would work.

	In the web page version, it was changed to:
	"The sound of that voice caused Tofu's glasses to immediately fog
over. "K-K-Kasumi?!"

	Ranma, peeking around the door from what he hoped was a safe
position, watched the pages of the book being reduced to their component
fibers. A flurry of minute paper shreds flew through the air and out the
open front door of the clinic."

of paper shreds flew through the air and out the opened door. 
"K-K-Kasumi!!!"

Ranma, peeking around the door from what he hoped was a safe 

position, 

watched the pages of the book being reduced to their 

component fibers. 

"...Well, damn..." was all he could think to say.
 

% Hmm. Akane would be screwed, though. Might have it be 
something more 
benign that happened to her. Maybe a Turret's pressure point. Or her 
hand suddenly swipes at things on its own unless she 
concentrates on it.

% Aside from that okay.

DB Sommer

	Oh well. Can't please everyone all the time. Hopefully you liked
Impression Five better.



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     Larry F

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