-----Original Message-----

Cologne came out of the kitchen of the Nekohanten when she heard the 
chime of the door opening. To her amazement, it was the last person 
she'd expect to see there voluntarily. "Hello, son-in-law. I'm 
surprised to see you here on your day off. Did you come to 

ask Shampoo 

out?"

Ranma blanched. "Er... Nah, nothin' like that. I just 

brought back the 

book you loaned to Doc Tofu, and want t' know if I can 

borrow the next 

one for Kasumi."

Cologne glanced at the title of the book. "Oh, that isn't my book. I 
borrowed it from Happi last week. Sorry, but you've made the 

trip out 

here for nothing."
 

% Hmm. I wonder where it ends.

	In the site version, this dialog is changed to:
	"Cologne glanced at the title of the book. "Oh, that isn't my book.
I got that from Happi last week. Sorry, but you've made the trip out here
for nothing. You'll have to see him and find out who he stole it from to see
if there are any more."

	'Oh great. Now I gotta go all the way back home. Talk about runnin'
around in circles!'"

***


"Her definition of 'borrow' is a little different. She took 

it out of 

my bag when I was resting after a bunch of naughty ladies beat me up 
for liberating some lovelies from their captivity on a 

clothesline at 

the university dorms."
 

% Again an awfully long sentence. Might want to break it into two.

	Again, already changed in the site version:
	"That depends on what you mean by 'got'. She took it out of my bag
when I was resting after a bunch of naughty ladies beat me up. Such bad
girls. All I did was liberate some lovelies from captivity on a clothesline
at the university dorms."

"What was it doing in your bag, then?"

"It might have somehow ended up in there when I passed through 
Jimbocho. I'm not sure, but I think I got it from a lovely 

young woman 

I met on Yasukuni Dori. You'll have no problem recognizing 

her. All of 

the shopkeepers have pictures of her in their stores."
 

% Heh. She's probably been looking for it for a while. Ironically, 
Yomiko would be more concerned about her books stolen than 
her underwear. :)

	Ain't that the truth.!

	This was also amended:
	""It might have somehow ended up in there when I passed through
Jimbocho. My memory is a bit hazy because so much has happened since then.
I'm not sure, but I may have gotten it from a lovely young woman I met on
Yasukuni Dori. You'll have no problem recognizing her. She's about a 'C'
cup, and all of the bookshops have pictures of her."

'They all have pictures? Huh. Wonder if she's an actress or singer?' As
Ranma slowly walked up the hallway towards the front door of the house, he
realized glumly that what he thought would be an easy errand was turning out
to be anything but.

***

Hours later, an exhausted Ranma arrived back at the Tendo home, metaphorical
tail dragging. 'Man, oh man,' Ranma thought to himself. 'That was one crazy
broad. And the way she was doin' that crazy dance around the bookstores on
Yasukuni Dori! If Doc Tofu liked to dress in drag, I bet he'd act like
that.'

He examined the damage to his clothing. 'That had to be the weirdest martial
arts technique I ever saw. Man, I hate paper cuts.'"

"Kasumi, I'm sorry, but nobody seemed to know whose book 

this is, so I 

couldn't return it or get the other one."

Kasumi turned around to greet the tired teenager, and then 

gasped. "Oh 

dear. I'm the one who should be apologizing, Ranma. That 

book belongs 

to me." She picked up a black covered book from the kitchen counter. 
"-This- is the book that I meant to return. I only noticed that I'd 
given you the wrong book after you left."

'I'm a man, mustn't cry. I'm a man, mustn't cry. I'm a man, mustn't 
cry....'
 

% Heh. Cute.

DB Sommer

	The final scene with Kasumi was reworded a bit, too. Nothing major,
though. Just enough to make it flow a little better.

	Yep, looks like you got on better with this one than with #3.

	Oh, yeah. Why do I skip from #3 to #5? Joe Fenton's entry became #4
when he gave me permission to post it on my page.



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     Larry F

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