On Sun, 21 Aug 2005 21:37:35 -0400, DB Sommer <sommert@connecttime.net> wrote:

[...]
"Chiyo-chan. She'd taste best with soy sauce and boiled brown rice, not 
fava beans and Chianti."

Kagura said, "You're on a new diet, aren't you?"

"Wow! How did you know?"

"Lucky guess."

I see how the joke is set up and I approve wholeheartedly. However,
it would be really nice to see what Chiyo did after that. Only how
to work it in...

Chiyo said, "You forgot your lunch and are trying to mooch off ours, 
aren't you?"

That's something Tomo should be saying, methinks.

 Tomo's arms went flying outward, sending the ball away as she fell 
backward, nearly unconscious.

Uncharacteristic determination in her features, she turned to the nearly 
unconscious Tomo and said, [...]

One of these "nearly unconscious" has to go, IMHO.

Overall, you are getting slicker with these stories than I thought was
possible for a mere human. Hmm, wait a second...

-- Pete

P.S. What is the connection with a Bader Fan group? Inquiring minds want
to know.

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