did the prologue portion of this earlier.

 >
 >
 > Conan shot her an incredulous stare. "BAROU! Didn't you see what just
 > happened here? Don't you understand? I'M A TARGET! These guys aren't 
playing
 > games, Ran! They make the yakuza look like playground bullies! I had 
to let
 > the world think I was dead! I couldn't take ANY chances..." He 
sighed. "And
 > yet, there were some chances...I had to take." He looked up. "I had 
to call
 > you. I had to...I couldn't bear seeing you suffering and not being able
 > to..."
 >
 > "And if you'd just told me the truth from the beginning..."
 >  
 >

% Conan: Would have killed a lot of tension in the series and watching 
me pretending to be someone I'm not. No, couldn't happen.

 >
 > *More consistent with the prints of a preadolescent...*
 >
 > *The fingerprints of Edogawa Conan were not present on the photograph...*
 >
 > *And Kudo-kun has been missing for months...*
 >
 > Megure's eyes widened. "That...no, that's...ridiculous..."
 >  
 >

% Absolutely. Do you know how science would be revolutionized by a serum 
that could  revert people to a younger age.It's be marketed in an instant.

 > "Oh, this is rich. Kudo forced you to take APTX-4869, didn't he?"
 >
 > The other two stared at her. "You *KNEW*?!"
 >
 > "Of course I knew," Vermouth said lightly. "I've known for some time that
 > Kudo Shinichi was still alive...AND had a hunch what the...*unusual* 
effects
 > of the apotoxin are."
 >
 > "And you didn't tell me this WHY?" Gin demanded hotly.
 >
 > "Because you didn't need to know,


% Actually knowing the drawbacks to a poison you're using would be 'need 
to know' information.

 > After he hung up, he rejoined the others for dinner and further
 > explanations. There had been many tense moments, and some truly 
embarassing
 > ones. He'd been interrogated rather harshly about a number of
 > things--particularly after Sonoko had, in jest, snagged his watch and
 > wondered what kind of 'secret spy thing' it was. He'd tried to stop 
her from
 > messing around with it, but the inevitable had happened--she'd 
accidentally
 > shot herself with the microtranquiliser, and slumped face-first into her
 > slice of corn and tofu pizza.
 >

% Better than eating a slice of corn and tofu pizza. Blech

 > Ran exhaled loudly. "Oh, it's Ai-chan. Come on in..."
 >  
 >

% Saw that one coming. :)

 >
 >
 > "Ah, right..." The small boy stuck his hands in his pockets, 
frowning. "So
 > what's our next move?"
 >
 > "MY next move is to get back to the lab and see if I can make a cure, now
 > that I have the drug. YOURS is to make sure none of us die before 
then. Oh,
 > and..." She frowned. "It won't be easy, but try to track down the other
 > victims of this stupid thing." She tapped the pill case for emphasis. 
"There
 > may be other people out there like us--we need to find them and get 
them all
 > together. Right now, anyone who has taken APTX-4869 and lived is the most
 > valuable weapon we have against them."
 >
 > Conan raised an eyebrow. "Do you have any idea how tall an order that is?
 > Finding little kids who aren't really kids here in Tokyo? Assuming 
they're
 > even all IN Tokyo?"
 >
 > Ai met him with a cool stare. "You're the 'great detective', Kudo-kun.
 > Finding stray sheep is right up your alley." With that, she turned 
and left,
 > concealing her face with the hood, mask, and sunglasses once again.
 >
 > Ran placed a hand on Conan's head and smiled down at him. "You can do it,
 > Shinichi. I know you can."
 >  
 >

% Nice purpose to the series. I'm assuming Chiyo is one.

 > *
 > Losing the baby had been the worst part of it.
 >  
 >

Oo. Tragic.

Nice work. Prose moved smoothly. No complaints here.

DB Sommer



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